The scorpion’s gate

Blech. I happily stranded this poorly written novel after a few pages. Rudimentary dialogue and sentence structure, I felt like I was reading one of my own written-in-6th-grade stories. I am trying to remember why I put this book on my To-Read list; I think Clarke was a Daily Show guest, which piqued my interest.
Syndetic Solutions classifies this as “Men’s Adventure” writing, but I’d have to clarify that as “Men Reading at a 4th grade level’s Adventure.”
A sample of Clarke’s “writing” is below, where you can see his overeagerness in getting into the story. He wants to tell all the details all at once. A better writer would tease us with this info over several pages. Suddenly, in the space of 2 paragraphs, we know his name, his bodyguards’ names, where he is, his title, who he works for, and what he’s done over the last 3 years. Crappy dialogue too… who names the person they are talking to?!
From Chapter 1:
‘Suddenly, Alec, one of Brian Douglas’s bodyguards, was over him. He wondered how long he had been down. Had he been out? “Does it hurt anywhere, sir?” Alec asked.
Brian now noticed that blood was dripping down from his scalp, matting his sandy hair. “No, Alec, somehow my luck has held once again” he said, getting up on one knee, grabbing the overturned table for support. Brian’s head spun like a carnival ride. He tried to wipe away some of the blood and dust and rubble from his face. “Where’s Ian?” For the three years that Brian Douglas had been Bahrain station chief of SIS, British intelligence, the staff at the station had insisted that he take two bodyguards with him wherever he went, driving to and from his house on Manama’s northern beach, going on trips elsewhere in the little country, or visiting the subordinate posts in the other Gulf states.’


auth=Clarke, Richard A.
pub=2005